Konnichiwa!
Today I'm sharing my writing with you.
Well uh, here it is!
Well uh, here it is!
I think I did pretty well with this writing.
I put the writing in paragraphs which is why I put it on different slides.
What could I improve on with my writing?
What was your favourite part?
Thanks for reading.
I put the writing in paragraphs which is why I put it on different slides.
What could I improve on with my writing?
What was your favourite part?
Thanks for reading.
Sayonara!
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Hi Amelia! I'm Nova From Greymain School I really Like your Writing it is so detailed. one thing that you could work on is maybe making your writing a bit bigger i found it a bit hard to read. I also liked how you used the flashlight and shined it on your writing.
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Hello Nova!
DeleteThanks for commenting.
I'm not trying to be rude, but can't you just click the fullscreen button?
Thanks again for commenting!
-Amelia
Hi Amelia
ReplyDeleteI love the imagery you have conjured up in this piece of writing. A dancing moon and then it becomes a golden moon.
I think you have introduced some writing that is part fantasy and part mystery. I am hoping that you will consider tying the clues together. Is it a code for a secret?
I look forward to the answer.
Hello Mr Robertson!
DeleteThanks for commenting.
It could be a code for a secret, but I don't really plan to finish the story. If I get bored I might though.
Thanks again for commenting!
-Amelia
HI Amelia
ReplyDeleteI want to know more! Will there be more installments?
You have use good description and created a sense of wonder well. Mahi pai!
Have a great weekend
Ms Lange
Hello Ms Lange!
DeleteThanks for commenting.
I don't think I will end up writing an ending to this story.
I will have a great weekend.
Thanks again for commenting!
-Amelia